An arrogant, popular high school bully discovers — but can’t control — strengthening-yet-unpredictable powers and is branded an outcast which compels him to work with a coven of gay and lesbian teen witches to uncover a conspiracy that threatens their town.

I agree that even though the concept is for a series, the logline should describe a plot for the pilot episode.

You obviously disagree about my suggestion that the logline ?would be more effective with a clear description of the superpowers. ?Good luck, if that's the way you want to do it. ?(IMHO , you'll need it.)

I agree that even though the concept is for a series, the logline should describe a plot for the pilot episode.

You obviously disagree about my suggestion that the logline ?would be more effective with a clear description of the superpowers. ?Good luck, if that's the way you want to do it. ?(IMHO , you'll need it.)

Series are best pitched with the pilot, as such you need to structure a logline for the first episode, then if a producer wants to know more you can go into further detail of the seasonal narrative.

When it comes to super powers, in a hypothetical situation, I would describe super man's powers as flight and strength. Obviously his super powers have become more complex since his character was first written, but the same elements of pragmatism apply - the particular aspect of the powers that will enable the character to overcome his major obstacle.

It's hard to place the genre and plot in the current draft of the logline which makes the concept confusing, this is because you have multiple trendy topics and agendas - gay/lesbian, witches and wizards, super heroes and high school pecking orders. I suggest pick one of these ad focus on that as the genre, then re consider the main character description as he still comes across as unlikable.

It's hard for me to make suggestions due to the lack of detail and genre confusion.