[Revised] A manipulative cat uses trickery and the dark arts to exact revenge upon an unappreciative mother, disrupting her big presentation.

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Everyone above has made great points so I'll help you out with a quick rewrite to get you on your way:

When her mother turns her into a cat as a punishment, a supernatural girl tries to exact revenge on her while adapting to her new body.?

Hope this helps.?

Everyone above has made great points so I'll help you out with a quick rewrite to get you on your way:

When her mother turns her into a cat as a punishment, a supernatural girl tries to exact revenge on her while adapting to her new body.?

Hope this helps.?

Agreed with DPG and Richiev.
Also without any background knowledge of the concept a reader may not get what you mean when describing the cat as; wanting to exact revenge on a human mother. If the cat is the daughter incarnate, then it needs to be in the logline otherwise the concept parts with reality and confuses the unsuspecting reader.

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