When a Talent Agency for Dogs is faced with imminent demise, a flamboyant receptionist has only 48 hours to convince the mid divorce agent, win the heart of a psychotic client and train his pooch to overcome stage fright in order to realize his dream and save the company.

Like, Nir Shelter I prefer that writers post revisions in the thread of a logline rather than posting ?the revision as a new logline. ?It facilitates continuity of ?discussion.

And also think the logline is cluttered with too many "objective goals". ?And I put objective goals in quotes because they really aren't objective goals. ?They are ways and means to obtain the singular objective goal: ?save the company.?

And I also concur with Nir Shelter that ?"flamboyant" is extraneous. ?While it may be a defining characteristic of the character it doesn't seem to be a relevant characteristic ?to the dramatic problem; IOW: ?it's not a character flaw that poses a threat, an obstacle to the character obtaining his objective goal.

Like, Nir Shelter I prefer that writers post revisions in the thread of a logline rather than posting ?the revision as a new logline. ?It facilitates continuity of ?discussion.

And also think the logline is cluttered with too many "objective goals". ?And I put objective goals in quotes because they really aren't objective goals. ?They are ways and means to obtain the singular objective goal: ?save the company.?

And I also concur with Nir Shelter that ?"flamboyant" is extraneous. ?While it may be a defining characteristic of the character it doesn't seem to be a relevant characteristic ?to the dramatic problem; IOW: ?it's not a character flaw that poses a threat, an obstacle to the character obtaining his objective goal.

Don't loose yourself in plot points, focus about the main character's flaw,?dream/goal, stakes.

for exemple:

"When his ugly pooch is diagnosed with cancer, an obsessive dog talent scout decide?to?find?a contract for him to pay?for his therapy"