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In an apocalyptic winter filled with zombies, Juliet is on a rampage to kill Romeo at all costs.
Hello, I love the title but the logline need a lot of work. You should avoid the names of the characters unless they are weel known characters - in your case it's clear that they are not the romeo and juliet that we know (they were in love and they didn't try to kill each other). You should includeRead more
Hello, I love the title but the logline need a lot of work. You should avoid the names of the characters unless they are weel known characters – in your case it’s clear that they are not the romeo and juliet that we know (they were in love and they didn’t try to kill each other). You should include an inciting event (what puts the story in motion), and some stakes.
See lessA naive girl with a useless superhero power struggles to see if true love really exists.
Hello, a logline should give a clear picture of the structure of the movie (read this little guide https://loglines.org/howto/ or any other guide on the internet) so you have to include an inciting event, opponent, stakes etc... Expressions such as "see if true love really exists" should be banned bRead more
Hello, a logline should give a clear picture of the structure of the movie (read this little guide https://loglines.org/howto/ or any other guide on the internet) so you have to include an inciting event, opponent, stakes etc… Expressions such as “see if true love really exists” should be banned because they’re too vague, they doesn’t mean anything visually, nor in terms of plot. What is the useless superpower (you should always be specific)?
See lessWhen his wife is kidnapped, a modern-day sorcerer (and NYC detective) hunts down her sadistic captor; but when the trail goes cold and even his supernatural friends can't help him, he must learn that love is the most powerful magic of all, before his wife is lost forever.
"he must learn that love is the most powerful magic of all", what does it means, visually? I don't think this kind of expression can be use in a logline, try to include some elements of the plot instead. "When his wife is kidnapped, a modern-day sorcerer (and NYC detective) must use his supernaturalRead more
“he must learn that love is the most powerful magic of all”,
what does it means, visually? I don’t think this kind of expression can be use in a logline, try to include some elements of the plot instead.
“When his wife is kidnapped, a modern-day sorcerer (and NYC detective) must use his supernatural powers and detective skills to hunt down her sadistic captor”
In this version it’s easy to see a lack of ‘irony’ (a sorcerer use supernatural powers / detective use detective skills) – this is not what can attract the reader’s interest- it would be better to have a detective who must trust magic or a sorcerer who must question his faith.
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