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When her agent drops her, a shy ?love story? author attends a horror movie workshop where screenwriters are kept prisoner by a perverse guru who makes them die like their characters, so that only the best writer will survive.
Hello, I certainly have a problem in explaining my idea. I try! guru's rules: -you are my prisoners, there is no way to escape. -you must write a scene where another guest dies. For exemple Mister white write a scene where Mister Brown (one o the writers) is drawned in the bathtub. Mister Brown writRead more
Hello, I certainly have a problem in explaining my idea.
I try!
guru’s rules:
-you are my prisoners, there is no way to escape.
-you must write a scene where another guest dies. For exemple Mister white write a scene where Mister Brown (one o the writers) is drawned in the bathtub. Mister Brown write a scene where Mister White dies because all the chess pieces are inserted in his ass one by one.
-at the end of the day the guru read the scenes and choose the better one.
-Mister White is forced to have all the chess pieces up his ass until he dies.
-The writer who is alive at the end will be free to leave. To stay alive they must write the most original scenes.
When they are actually killed, they all ‘play’ their role better than any actor because it’s real!
When the guru reads a scene, sometimes we “saw” the scene, so all the characters can virtually be killed many times.
See lessWhen an exceptional London policeman discover a cult of murderers in a remote English village, he and his clumsy partner must bring them to justice.
Hello, I saw the movie but I didn't recognized it! I personally do not agree with your choice of the inciting event. Maybe it's more the story of a london policeman who is sent to a very small and calm village. And you can describe better the main character as a cop with an overdeveloped sense of duRead more
Hello, I saw the movie but I didn’t recognized it!
I personally do not agree with your choice of the inciting event. Maybe it’s more the story of a london policeman who is sent to a very small and calm village. And you can describe better the main character as a cop with an overdeveloped sense of duty (his flow, what he need to change).
One more thing, when it’s a comedy it should be clear form the logline style.
See lessA bus driver trying to get home for his daughter's birthday is confronted with his sinister past when a sadistic passenger with a score to settle refuses to get off at the last stop.
Hello, this is a good start, but doesn't tell anything about the real story. try to avoi sentences like " is confronted with his sinister past" because that doesn't mean anything: in a good logline you should always be very specific. "When a sadistic passenger _______does x_________, a bus driver muRead more
Hello, this is a good start, but doesn’t tell anything about the real story. try to avoi sentences like ” is confronted with his sinister past” because that doesn’t mean anything: in a good logline you should always be very specific.
“When a sadistic passenger _______does x_________, a bus driver must ____does y_____, if he wants to get home for his daughter’s birthday”.
I think that the fact that the passenger refuses to get off is not strong enough as inciting event. What actually DOES the passanger? What does he WANT?
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