Hello, maybe instead of focusing about “a conversation” between two mens, try to write the “larger story (that we are seeing)” as you said- this is what is important, the action that you track in the script.

There is another element which is unclear: if the torture is legal and sponsored by the gouvernment, what an undercover agent should investigate? If it’s only the fact that the torturer try to take personal advantages from the prisoners but the torture itself is not an issue this would be a very tricky movie.

Maybe ou can start with “in a future where the gouvernement openly sponsors torture” – but in reading the logline I can’t undestand why the fact that the torture is largely and openly practiced makes the story different form a real guantanamo where torture was spread and ordinary enough. I don’t think you need a world where torture is officially admitted, you just need a ‘special world’, a place where it is ordinary. The concept is interesting but it needs a rewrite. Focus about a precise goal for the torturer too: finding a terrorist leader treasure? what about ‘preventing a huge terrorist attack’, or even ‘find the responsable of an attack where his familie died’? If we have to root for the torturer this can be a way to guide us.