1. Posted: September 5, 2012In:

    A violent gangster turns vigilante when his young son is murdered, but when he executes an undercover cop, his operation backfires.

    Filmstar Penpusher

    actually I lied - he wasn't an undercover cop the Hero killed - but an ex- Royal marine commando working for an anti-trafficking NGO who goes undercover - the vigilante kills him by mistake - so we're 5 years later when his commando son comes back for revenge... there's no police after the hero - exRead more

    actually I lied – he wasn’t an undercover cop the Hero killed – but an ex- Royal marine commando working for an anti-trafficking NGO who goes undercover – the vigilante kills him by mistake – so we’re 5 years later when his commando son comes back for revenge… there’s no police after the hero – except for his present crimes…

    Your logline still works tho – so thanks. I’m sure I can get it down to 25 words – almost is already. 😀

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  2. Posted: September 5, 2012In:

    A violent gangster-vigilante is forced to judge his own actions and be sentenced by his own laws.

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    yep...no I'm with you. Back with your other one. BIG help...

    yep…no I’m with you. Back with your other one. BIG help…

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  3. Posted: September 5, 2012In:

    A violent gangster turns vigilante when his young son is murdered, but when he executes an undercover cop, his operation backfires.

    Filmstar Penpusher

    haha, poetry was invented to be butchered ! Don't worry, it's at least my 30th attempt at this logline - and you've hit the nail on the head straight away. Thank God for an outside eye... Now how do I get that to 25 words...? Hmmm.... Thanks man.

    haha, poetry was invented to be butchered ! Don’t worry, it’s at least my 30th attempt at this logline – and you’ve hit the nail on the head straight away. Thank God for an outside eye…

    Now how do I get that to 25 words…?

    Hmmm….

    Thanks man.

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