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When a demonic book is brought into a college couple home, the couple must find the source of there internal struggles before they become its next victim.
I am not sure how the two ideas presented in your logline connect, How does solving relationship problems stop a demon-possessed book? There doesn't seem to be any hint in your logline on how those two things connect. As an example, If there is a magic ring that is the power base for an evil sorcereRead more
I am not sure how the two ideas presented in your logline connect, How does solving relationship problems stop a demon-possessed book? There doesn’t seem to be any hint in your logline on how those two things connect.
As an example, If there is a magic ring that is the power base for an evil sorcerer, I understand how throwing the ring in a volcano would be a valid goal, because the volcano would melt the ring and destroy the power base. And by that same logic, if you said the couple must throw the evil book into a volcano I would understand how that would stop the book.
But if the couple resolved their relationship problems wouldn’t the evil demon-possessed book still be a problem? How does the couple solving their relationship problems destroy the book?
See lessWhen an explorer’s ancient necklace is stolen, she must retrieve it before it is used for evil.
Your logline is short enough you could add a few details to flesh out the story in the reader's mind: When her ancient necklace (That can control the weather) is stolen by an evil (Witchdoctor) an intrepid explorer with a knack for trouble must get the artifact back, before it's used to (wreaRead more
Your logline is short enough you could add a few details to flesh out the story in the reader’s mind:
When her ancient necklace (That can control the weather) is stolen by an evil (Witchdoctor) an intrepid explorer with a knack for trouble must get the artifact back, before it’s used to (wreak havoc on the world)
See lessA couple new acquaintances, memory damage and pain escallating hallucination influence the dark recovery of a young man who woke impossibly from a long term coma
Both this logline and your previous one string words together in such a way that confuses the reader instead of clarifying the story. As a result, I don't believe this logline is doing justice to your story. From reading both loglines I am making out three interesting elements 1: Your lead characterRead more
Both this logline and your previous one string words together in such a way that confuses the reader instead of clarifying the story.
As a result, I don’t believe this logline is doing justice to your story.
From reading both loglines I am making out three interesting elements
1: Your lead character wakes from a long term coma.
2: Upon waking up your character is beset by pain and hallucinations.
3: His awakening has gone viral (This is from your last logline)
But what seems missing from your logline, is your lead character’s goal.
What does your lead character want, and what bad thing will happen if he fails to get it?
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