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In the future, 4 friends go on a field trip into the 1940s. When they return, the future has changed greatly, which now has the United States under dictatorship. Now the boys must find out what happened and who changed the world.
Traveling to the past and changing the future for worse is standard fare in science fiction. I would try coming up with a hook that grabs the reader. An Example: ----- "After accidentally sleeping with his great grandmother, a time traveler must destroy the temporal circle he created before the fabrRead more
Traveling to the past and changing the future for worse is standard fare in science fiction. I would try coming up with a hook that grabs the reader.
An Example:
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“After accidentally sleeping with his great grandmother, a time traveler must destroy the temporal circle he created before the fabric of time is rent asunder and the universe ceases to exist.”
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Of course the end of this story would be, he realizes if the universe is to be saved, he must kill himself. 🙂 A happy story!
But that would just be an example
Good luck with your story, find a hook!
See lessSenior Hayden Duarte has it all: Scholarship to Texas A&M, the Brains, and the girls. But Hayden likes to bully people with disabilities. But when tragedy hits home hard, Hayden learns a lot about friendship, faith, and life.
The line. "When tragedy hits home hard" doesn't draw the reader in, it's too vague. When his best friend is diagnosed with MS When his beloved little sister becomes paralyzed When his older brother loses both legs in Afghanistan. Be specific with the "tragedy that hits home hard" and you will draw tRead more
The line. “When tragedy hits home hard” doesn’t draw the reader in, it’s too vague.
When his best friend is diagnosed with MS
When his beloved little sister becomes paralyzed
When his older brother loses both legs in Afghanistan.
Be specific with the “tragedy that hits home hard” and you will draw the reader into your story.
See lessAn average-everyday guy with a crappy life wins the $42 million lottery. But what he doesn't know is that the system is corrupt and they now want him dead.
You say a corrupt system wants him dead; however a system is faceless, you need a main antagonist to put a face on that corrupt system. ----- "After winning a record breaking lottery an average Joe's life is endangered when a corrupt lottery official targets him for Death." ----- Alright mine stillRead more
You say a corrupt system wants him dead; however a system is faceless, you need a main antagonist to put a face on that corrupt system.
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“After winning a record breaking lottery an average Joe’s life is endangered when a corrupt lottery official targets him for Death.”
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Alright mine still needs work but I hope you see what I did. I started with the event that triggers the story then added an antagonist.
Hope that helped, good luck with this!
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