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When a many-times-jilted long-distance truckie falls in love online with a city writer, he must learn to trust again, to win her heart.
What's a truckie? Just curious
What’s a truckie? Just curious
See lessAn unexperienced musician will prove to his friends that he can succeed in everything he intends, starting by being a male escort.
First: I'm not sure what an 'unexperienced' musician is??? (btw, I would personally use the word 'inexperienced') Does it mean he's just leaning to play an instrument. Does it mean he's an amateur; someone who plays well but doesn't have paying gigs??? ----- Second: "...Will prove to his friends heRead more
First: I’m not sure what an ‘unexperienced’ musician is??? (btw, I would personally use the word ‘inexperienced’)
Does it mean he’s just leaning to play an instrument.
Does it mean he’s an amateur; someone who plays well but doesn’t have paying gigs???
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Second: “…Will prove to his friends he can succeed in everything he intends.” This sounds as if you are giving away the ending. You are letting us know in the logline he succeeds. I would avoid giving away the end of a movie in the logline.
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Third: “Proving to his friends” is a very subjective goal. Does the lead character have a specific goal?
Anyway, this logline does need work but if you give your lead character a specific goal and leave a little mystery (don’t give away the ending) you will improve your logline.
Hope that helped, good luck with this!
See lessWhen a brain injury puts a surefire pro football prospect's institutional loyalty into question, he must rediscover himself and rise to protect his teammates from a ruthless coaching staff.
"When a brain injury calls a surefire pro football prospect's loyalty to question, he must rise to protect his teammates from the ruthless head coach."
“When a brain injury calls a surefire pro football prospect’s loyalty to question, he must rise to protect his teammates from the ruthless head coach.”
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