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  1. Posted: May 20, 2013In: Public

    ?When Sam Blake, the best hitman in the US, wants to retire and right his wrongs, he will have to do what he swore he would never do again.?

    Richiev Singularity
    Added an answer on May 20, 2013 at 6:05 pm

    I have always wondered why hitmen in movies always want to right their wrongs or give it up and make amends. You would think if they had that kind of moral code they wouldn't have become hitmen in the first place. ----- As for the logline: "...he will have to do what he swore he would never do againRead more

    I have always wondered why hitmen in movies always want to right their wrongs or give it up and make amends. You would think if they had that kind of moral code they wouldn’t have become hitmen in the first place.
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    As for the logline: “…he will have to do what he swore he would never do again.” is so vague it tells us nothing about the story.

    Why is he retiring? What event caused him to retire. “When a hitman accidentally kills a child…” “When a hitman is hired to kill the love of his life…” give us something to work with.

    Let us knoiw what he will never do again… “He swears he will never kill again…”

    Then give us a reason why he is breaking his vow “…But when a vicious gang kidnaps his beloved niece he must do what he swore he would never do again.”

    You have to give us the event that make him change his ways, tell us what he swears he will never do again, then tell us what even causes him to go back on his vow. (All within about 30 words:)

    Hope that helps, good luck with this!

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  2. Posted: May 19, 2013In: Public

    A prominent businessman must play with an insane kidnapper a 20 questions game to find and save his wife.

    Richiev Singularity
    Added an answer on May 20, 2013 at 6:21 am

    I agree with dpg, great hook! "After his wife is kidnapped, a grieving businessman has two hours to play 20 questions in order to save her." "After his wife is kidnapped, a grieving businessman is forced by a psychopath to play 20 twenty questions for a chance to save her." Hope those helped, good lRead more

    I agree with dpg, great hook!

    “After his wife is kidnapped, a grieving businessman has two hours to play 20 questions in order to save her.”

    “After his wife is kidnapped, a grieving businessman is forced by a psychopath to play 20 twenty questions for a chance to save her.”

    Hope those helped, good luck with this!

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  3. Posted: May 17, 2013In: Public

    (Comedy) After the death of his wife (Mell),the oldest outlaw in a notorious biker gang decides to convert his bandits into neighborhood watch members, Whilst his enemies raise the price on his head.

    Richiev Singularity
    Added an answer on May 19, 2013 at 4:08 am

    Sorry, I meant Honors her dying "wish"

    Sorry, I meant Honors her dying “wish”

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