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The memories of his last leave and a chance encounter with his lost love inspire a British Officer to survive the last months of War so he can return to England and live the life with her he always dreamed of.
"After a former love informs him he has a son, A lonely British officer must survive his units final, war-ending offensive if he's to return to them."
“After a former love informs him he has a son, A lonely British officer must survive his units final, war-ending offensive if he’s to return to them.”
See lessThe memories of his last leave and a chance encounter with his lost love inspire a British Officer to survive the last months of War so he can return to England and live the life with her he always dreamed of.
I have to say this isn't the easiest story to put a logline to. How about: "After a chance encounter with his lost love, A British officer must survive his units final, war-ending offensive if he's to return home to her." Hope that helped, good luck with this!
I have to say this isn’t the easiest story to put a logline to. How about:
“After a chance encounter with his lost love, A British officer must survive his units final, war-ending offensive if he’s to return home to her.”
Hope that helped, good luck with this!
See lessA 24 year-old man needs the helping hand of his ex-rival?s foul-mouthed womanizing ghost to overcome his impotence and get laid.
"A 24 year-old man" This line doesn't tell us about the main character. You should say something like: A lonely librarian, an uptight business man, A reclusive neat-freak. ----- "ex-rival?s foul-mouthed womanizing ghost" This should be changed because it's a little confusing. (It could be read thatRead more
“A 24 year-old man”
This line doesn’t tell us about the main character. You should say something like: A lonely librarian, an uptight business man, A reclusive neat-freak.
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“ex-rival?s foul-mouthed womanizing ghost”
This should be changed because it’s a little confusing. (It could be read that his ex-rival had the same ghost haunting him)
“The ghost of his rival, a foul mouthed womanizer,”
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ex-rival
There is no context for this, was he a rival at work? Was he a rival for the love of a specific woman?
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“needs the helping hand” “to overcome his impotence”
Is his rival giving him handjobs??? If so, this is a great line, if not, I would change the line to avoid confusion 🙂
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Interesting premise for a raunchy comedy, good luck with this!