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A whirlwind trip home proves disastrous for Annabelle as she battles family demons
Hello Amanda, We need a little more to this logline because at the moment, I'm not sure if you are describing "The Exorcist" or "Rachael Getting Married." Does her return home cause old family arguments and hurt feelings to resurface or does she go home only to find her family's been possessed bloodRead more
Hello Amanda, We need a little more to this logline because at the moment, I’m not sure if you are describing “The Exorcist” or “Rachael Getting Married.”
Does her return home cause old family arguments and hurt feelings to resurface or does she go home only to find her family’s been possessed blood sucking demons that she must battle?
With a some changes hopefully your logline will more clearly reflect the story you are telling.
Hope that helped, good luck with this!
See lessMauled by a rabid dog, a truck driver stumbles down the road to a nearby trailer park and begs for help. But when the residents refuse to come to his aide his condition worsens and he becomes a ruthless killer.
The second logline is better. It makes it clear the movie is from the point of view of the residents, although I don't think you need to say "His condition worsens" "When the residents of a trailer park refuse to help a rabies victim, he becomes a ruthless killer and now they must stop him before thRead more
The second logline is better. It makes it clear the movie is from the point of view of the residents, although I don’t think you need to say “His condition worsens”
“When the residents of a trailer park refuse to help a rabies victim, he becomes a ruthless killer and now they must stop him before the virus spreads.”
Hope that helped, Good luck with this.
See lessMauled by a rabid dog, a truck driver stumbles down the road to a nearby trailer park and begs for help. But when the residents refuse to come to his aide his condition worsens and he becomes a ruthless killer.
This has the makings of an interesting idea however there are a couple issues with the logline. First: I see this a lot in loglines. the logline describes how a character travels to a plot point, instead of just telling us a plot point. We don't need to know that he stumbles down a road to a nearbyRead more
This has the makings of an interesting idea however there are a couple issues with the logline.
First: I see this a lot in loglines. the logline describes how a character travels to a plot point, instead of just telling us a plot point.
We don’t need to know that he stumbles down a road to a nearby trailer park in the logline. how he travels to a plot point is just extra words. (Keep it in the script, just not the logline)
“After being mauled by a rabid dog a truck drivers begs the residents of a nearby trailer park for help.”
Second: You haven’t told us what the lead character wants or what is standing in his way. I like that we’re seeing the story through the eyes of the killer but he still has to have a goal and conflict in reaching his goal.
Anyway, hope this helped, I like the idea, good luck with this!
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