1. Posted: January 12, 2013In:

    A young man that is unhappy from his desk job being a pushover and not taking seriously comes home frustrated to the point he decides to kill his young neighbor, however she gets free due to his ignorance of killing someone.

    Richiev Singularity

    You went to far the other direction with this. The first attempt you just gave us the set up This attempt you gave us the ending. Don't give the ending in a logline. Still love the idea, keep it up

    You went to far the other direction with this.

    The first attempt you just gave us the set up
    This attempt you gave us the ending.

    Don’t give the ending in a logline.

    Still love the idea, keep it up

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  2. Posted: January 13, 2013In:

    When a 50-foot moose goes on a rampage, a commitment-phobic biologist must infiltrate the genetics lab run by his former lover to uncover the secret to destroy the creature.

    Richiev Singularity

    I love the title I think you nailed the logline

    I love the title

    I think you nailed the logline

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  3. Posted: January 12, 2013In:

    Hey y'all! I wrote 2 for the same script. Preferences, suggestions, ideas are welcome. Great forum !! #1. A promising young professor is forced to return to his remote and crumbling hometown, where he finds a monomaniac preacher who claims to know the secret behind his dark past. #2. After learning of a friend?s mysterious death, a young professor must return to his remote and crumbling hometown, where he finds a monomaniac preacher spreading a dark and dangerous gospel.

    Richiev Singularity

    I agree woobot, The idea that he "battles the preacher" instead of he just "finds the preacher" adds conflict to the logline.

    I agree woobot, The idea that he “battles the preacher” instead of he just “finds the preacher” adds conflict to the logline.

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