1. Posted: January 3, 2013In:

    With dreams of writing the next great American novel, a struggling author blackmails a middle-aged hitman for inspiration.

    Richiev Singularity

    This logline doesn't explain how blackmailing a hitman will lead to writing the next great American novel or what the consequences are.

    This logline doesn’t explain how blackmailing a hitman will lead to writing the next great American novel or what the consequences are.

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  2. Posted: January 1, 2013In:

    When a devoted woman suspects infidelity in her husband and then realizes afterwards that she made a mistake, she must reverse a drastic decision she took to hurt him or their children die.

    Richiev Singularity

    "Made a mistake" and "drastic decision" are so vague that "...Or their children die" seems like it is out of nowhere."

    “Made a mistake” and “drastic decision” are so vague that “…Or their children die” seems like it is out of nowhere.”

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  3. Posted: January 1, 2013In:

    Celebrating 30 years, a retiring detective's last case is to investigate a theft where he must protect the criminals he planned the crime with.

    Richiev Singularity

    This is a little confusing, Was the Detective in on the crime?

    This is a little confusing, Was the Detective in on the crime?

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