1. Posted: December 19, 2012In:

    John always used his clairvoyance as a crutch but when he sees himself killing an unknown woman, he must escape the crosshairs of the all-seeing organization KEN.

    Richiev Singularity

    lol, 'KEN', nice touch. (Good thing organization 'Doug' wasn't after her or it would be all over)

    lol, ‘KEN’, nice touch.

    (Good thing organization ‘Doug’ wasn’t after her or it would be all over)

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  2. Posted: December 19, 2012In:

    A brilliant but destructive singer, struggling to get signed, must overcome her addictions before she destroys her band and her life.

    Richiev Singularity

    Thanks, great advice. "When a brilliant but destructive singer lets her addictions get in the way of her band being signed she must fight to get clean or lose her dream." In the story, Her sister is the one fighting for her to get clean. (a bit of a battle of wills) She and her sister get in a hugeRead more

    Thanks, great advice.

    “When a brilliant but destructive singer lets her addictions get in the way of her band being signed she must fight to get clean or lose her dream.”

    In the story, Her sister is the one fighting for her to get clean. (a bit of a battle of wills) She and her sister get in a huge argument. her sister get’s in an accident and dies. It is the final straw that pushes her to get clean. Concentrating on two characters in the logline would probably make it too long.

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  3. Posted: December 18, 2012In:

    Two teens on a police ride-along for very different reasons discover a web of corruption, drugs and murder under the surface of their quiet Texas town…

    Richiev Singularity

    I guess the question I have is, who is the bad guy, the chief of police? The mayor, a corrupt businessman? The father of one of the teens? I like the premise, I can see the teens sinking more and more in trouble since who are they going to tell? The police?

    I guess the question I have is, who is the bad guy, the chief of police? The mayor, a corrupt businessman? The father of one of the teens?

    I like the premise, I can see the teens sinking more and more in trouble since who are they going to tell? The police?

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