1. Posted: December 12, 2012In:

    A devastated 14 year old girl and her seemingly psychotic brother hoping for a better life with their affluent father after he won a divorce proceedings discover that his home turns out to be a prison of misfortunes in which they have to find a means of escape.

    Richiev Singularity

    How about this: After a devastating divorce forces them to live with their abusive father, two siblings must find a way to escape or... (Something needs to go here)

    How about this:

    After a devastating divorce forces them to live with their abusive father, two siblings must find a way to escape or… (Something needs to go here)

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  2. Posted: December 12, 2012In:

    Tired of being told she doesn't take risks, a nerdy mathematician creates an ingenious problem and proclaims; slay the dragon, get the girl.

    Richiev Singularity

    That is a good point debbiemoon. The problem presented in the story is, she doesn't take risks, the solution is creating the math problem but I haven't given any risk, Emily is a freshman in college, both her roommate and a guy she turned down for a frat party invitation, tell her the same thing. CoRead more

    That is a good point debbiemoon. The problem presented in the story is, she doesn’t take risks, the solution is creating the math problem but I haven’t given any risk,

    Emily is a freshman in college, both her roommate and a guy she turned down for a frat party invitation, tell her the same thing. College is where you take chances, do new things. You aren’t supposed to study on a Friday night or read books all the time. Live a little.

    The story follows two characters, both Emily and David (The guy who solves the problem) I chose to concentrate on one character for the logline, since Emily is the one who sets everything in motion by creating the math problem I chose her.

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  3. Posted: December 12, 2012In:

    Tired of being told she doesn't take risks, a nerdy mathematician creates an ingenious problem and proclaims; slay the dragon, get the girl.

    Richiev Singularity

    Thanks for your reply, Both the reason for not adding that the problem was a math problem and not saying that she named the math problem "The Dragon" is for repetition sake. Saying she's a mathematician implies she would create a math problem. Saying she created a problem called the Dragon, naming tRead more

    Thanks for your reply, Both the reason for not adding that the problem was a math problem and not saying that she named the math problem “The Dragon” is for repetition sake.

    Saying she’s a mathematician implies she would create a math problem. Saying she created a problem called the Dragon, naming the story, Emily and the Dragon and telling the guys, slay the Dragon get the girl, would repeat the word Dragon three times.

    So If I can find a way to clarify in the logline without repetition I will gladly do it.

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