1. Posted: May 25, 2020In:

    When Michael loses his wife and two children in a horrific car accident, he recovers a tunnel to the past before they die, and fights against fate to prevent them from taking the car on that fateful day.

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    Richiev Singularity

    I had a weird thought for this:A: What if the husband succeeds in saving his wife, but in the process is hit by the very car which killed his family.B: The story returns to the new timeline the wife is alive, the husband is dead.C: She then discovers the time tunnel and vows to use it to save her deRead more

    I had a weird thought for this:

    A: What if the husband succeeds in saving his wife, but in the process is hit by the very car which killed his family.

    B: The story returns to the new timeline the wife is alive, the husband is dead.

    C: She then discovers the time tunnel and vows to use it to save her dead husband.

    D: She enters the tunnel in order to save her husband… fade to black. (THE END)

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  2. Posted: May 25, 2020In:

    When Michael loses his wife and two children in a horrific car accident, he recovers a tunnel to the past before they die, and fights against fate to prevent them from taking the car on that fateful day.

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    Richiev Singularity

    "When he discovers a tunnel to the past, a grieving widower uses the passage in the hopes of saving family from the horrific accident that took them from him."

    “When he discovers a tunnel to the past, a grieving widower uses the passage in the hopes of saving family from the horrific accident that took them from him.”

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  3. Posted: May 25, 2020In:

    Children taken away from their families and off the street are experimented on to become weapons in a unseen war. Only one, a young girl, survives and becomes a force to be reckoned with.

    Richiev Singularity

    You are missing an important element, the lead character's goalTry re-writing this logline from the lead character's point of view"When she is kidnapped by a secret organization, a local street-girl turned assassin must.." (Then add her goal)

    You are missing an important element, the lead character’s goal

    Try re-writing this logline from the lead character’s point of view

    “When she is kidnapped by a secret organization, a local street-girl turned assassin must..” (Then add her goal)

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