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An uncompromising documentary maker is forced to manipulate the reality he is filming in order to save his career.
This logline needs a hook. "When he is given one last chance to make a successful documentary, an uncompromising filmmaker purposely keeps people from feeding the homeless he is filming in order to make their plight more dramatic." In other words, what specifically is he filming, and what specific uRead more
This logline needs a hook.
“When he is given one last chance to make a successful documentary, an uncompromising filmmaker purposely keeps people from feeding the homeless he is filming in order to make their plight more dramatic.”
In other words, what specifically is he filming, and what specific unethical thing does he manipulate?
Adding those two elements will help draw in the reader.
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When he gets to an unknown place, a young student, must find out where he is.
I am a big fan of succinct loglines, however, yours might have taken it a bit too far, I can't really visualize an unknown place or an unknown person. (The last from you quick synopsis) ----- "When he wakes in a magical land beside a beautiful girl, a gifted math prodigy must use all his skills to dRead more
I am a big fan of succinct loglines, however, yours might have taken it a bit too far, I can’t really visualize an unknown place or an unknown person. (The last from you quick synopsis)
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“When he wakes in a magical land beside a beautiful girl, a gifted math prodigy must use all his skills to determine where he is and how to get back to his own world.”
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Obviously, yours will be different. Was the lead transported to a different world? Is it a different city? Is it a basement with two people in handcuffs and one must chop off their hand to escape? I can’t tell from your logline.
When faced with his fathers “old world” mindset demand to become a successful football player and run the family restaurant business, a teenage, integrated migrant Hip-Hop kid, decides against the family traditions, that brings him into troubles and the family to desperation.
"Faced with his father's "old world" mindset, a well-meaning migrant kid pursues his passion for hip-hop angering his father who wants him to work in the family business."
“Faced with his father’s “old world” mindset, a well-meaning migrant kid pursues his passion for hip-hop angering his father who wants him to work in the family business.”
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