1. Posted: October 5, 2019In:

    In order to progress through heaven’s gates,? ghosts must pay penance by returning to earth and helping the people they hurt.

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    What you have here is world-building.   You don't have a lead character, your lead character doesn't have a specific goal, and what is standing in the way of the lead character's goal?

    What you have here is world-building.

     

    You don’t have a lead character, your lead character doesn’t have a specific goal, and what is standing in the way of the lead character’s goal?

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  2. Posted: October 4, 2019In:

    Two strangers find themselves in an abandoned town, Penance Peak, and as the sun begins to set, they begin to realise that their dark secrets can?t stay hidden forever.

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    Who is the lead character What do they want What is standing in their way

    Who is the lead character

    What do they want

    What is standing in their way

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  3. Posted: October 3, 2019In:

    (4th revision) A vigilante hacker spies on a power-hungry corporation as they confirm reality itself can be manipulated like computer code, and finds herself in a race with them to leverage this power and stop them from controlling the world.

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    "When A powerhunger corporation creates a computer code that can control reality, it is up to a vigilante hacker to stop them before they attain world domination."

    “When A powerhunger corporation creates a computer code that can control reality, it is up to a vigilante hacker to stop them before they attain world domination.”

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