1. Posted: July 28, 2017In:

    After being dumped a woman must survive in the city without her sugar daddy boyfriend and avoid the millennial fate, moving home with her parents.

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    "After being dumped by her sugar daddy, a spoiled millennial must (Do this thing) if she is to avoid the terrible fate of moving back in with her controlling parents."

    “After being dumped by her sugar daddy, a spoiled millennial must (Do this thing) if she is to avoid the terrible fate of moving back in with her controlling parents.”

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  2. Posted: July 24, 2017In:

    When she is targeted by a rival tech firm for software code in her head, a closed off data courier with a photographic memory must finish her latest delivery to survive. Only problem: For some reason, she can’t remember ever accepting the job.

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    I would also re-word the ending, since it seems like not remembering accepting the job is actually the least of her problems.

    I would also re-word the ending, since it seems like not remembering accepting the job is actually the least of her problems.

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  3. Posted: July 25, 2017In:

    After a near drowning makes him the target of an evil spirit, an avoidant teenager must endure hellish heat when a bushfire threatens to destroy his hideout. (27)

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    I do think the new attempt is better, I am not sure about the word avoidant though.?I had to look it up to find out it is Avoidant personality disorder, ?as a result you might want to use the whole term for clarity. At this point I am interested what other's think of your new attempt.

    I do think the new attempt is better, I am not sure about the word avoidant though.?I had to look it up to find out it is Avoidant personality disorder, ?as a result you might want to use the whole term for clarity. At this point I am interested what other’s think of your new attempt.

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