Have an account? Sign In Now
Lost your password? Please enter your email address. You will receive a link and will create a new password via email.
Please briefly explain why you feel this question should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this answer should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this user should be reported.
When two wholesome brothers inherit a strip club they must not only overcome their own prejudices to see it succeed, but also defend it when the upright community decides to drive it out of business
Having a character do something that goes against their nature makes for great storytellingHowever; there must be a compelling reason why they would. For instance: Zack and Miri are on their last dollar, their electricity is out, it's winter and they must survive... so they make a porno.You have givRead more
Having a character do something that goes against their nature makes for great storytelling
However; there must be a compelling reason why they would.
For instance: Zack and Miri are on their last dollar, their electricity is out, it’s winter and they must survive… so they make a porno.
You have given us an interesting situation, but you haven’t given us the stakes if they fail, or the compelling reason why they must run a strip club.
Anyway, adding a compelling reason why they ‘must’ run the club will improve your logline greatly.
See lessWhen a find of ancient coins is stolen, a policeman must track a cold case from Nazi Germany to catch a Gestapo Officer’s murderous grandson.
I am a little confused about this story. It seems as though the coins are stolen in the present, but you refer to it as a 'cold case' It would just be a case. Also I don't think you can track a case. you would track a person, you would investigate a case.However it does seem like an interesting ideaRead more
I am a little confused about this story. It seems as though the coins are stolen in the present, but you refer to it as a ‘cold case’ It would just be a case.
Also I don’t think you can track a case. you would track a person, you would investigate a case.
However it does seem like an interesting idea, I would clarify the wording so the logline isn’t as confusing.
See lessWhen his grandmother sets him up with a man they?ve just met, an architect must decide between a loveless relationship and reinventing himself to complete The Playground and reclaim himself ? and the man he loves.
For me, I see the lead as completely loyal. His word is his bond. He was married before he even realize he was gay, His wife is a good woman but because he is gay there is no passion. (He probably hasn't even confessed it to anyone) His grandma wants him to be happy. She probably knew he was gay eveRead more
For me, I see the lead as completely loyal. His word is his bond. He was married before he even realize he was gay, His wife is a good woman but because he is gay there is no passion. (He probably hasn’t even confessed it to anyone)
His grandma wants him to be happy. She probably knew he was gay even before he did.
She tricks him into making a promise. (A promise he must keep because he always keeps his promises)
Now that he is on the date and it is going well, there is a struggle, he really likes the guy but he will not break his marriage vows.
To make a set up like this work, early on you would have to show the audience his loyalty, maybe at work he keeps a promise that loses him money but because he made a promise he kept his word.
See less