1. Posted: May 27, 2021In:

    A boy whose family was brutally murdered joins a squad of bounty hunters squad to free a community of women and children victims of a gang dedicated to making snuff movies.

    Richiev Singularity

    I agree with Odie, you should connect the inciting incident with the goal. The gang that does the snuff films should be the gang that killed his family. (By that, I mean it should be in the logline)

    I agree with Odie, you should connect the inciting incident with the goal.

    The gang that does the snuff films should be the gang that killed his family. (By that, I mean it should be in the logline)

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  2. Posted: May 28, 2021In:

    When a woman with abandonment issues gets dumped, she drags her pregnant bestie on a roadtrip, attempting to find love again. Halfway there, she learns she too is pregnant. She considers keeping the baby, so as to never be alone again. Forced to deliver her friend’s baby in the car, she realizes her need is not a baby, but the love that has always been in their friendship.

    Richiev Singularity

    Great logline example Odie.

    Great logline example Odie.

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  3. Posted: May 28, 2021In:

    When a woman with abandonment issues gets dumped, she drags her pregnant bestie on a roadtrip, attempting to find love again. Halfway there, she learns she too is pregnant. She considers keeping the baby, so as to never be alone again. Forced to deliver her friend’s baby in the car, she realizes her need is not a baby, but the love that has always been in their friendship.

    Richiev Singularity

    You probably shouldn't tell the reader how the story ends, in the logline.

    You probably shouldn’t tell the reader how the story ends, in the logline.

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