1. Posted: May 9, 2021In:

    A proud father loses his Crop Dusting business after 09/11 shutdowns, and addiction threatens his dignity; his only redemption may cost him his life as stealing his repoed plane could do more than break the bank.

    Richiev Singularity

    The idea is solid. But perhaps you should use the savings and loan scandal instead of 9/11. The idea is that the greedy banker shut down the lead character's business in spite of the fact the banker, who broke the law, got bailed out and is still living in a mansion. --------------------------- "WheRead more

    The idea is solid. But perhaps you should use the savings and loan scandal instead of 9/11.

    The idea is that the greedy banker shut down the lead character’s business in spite of the fact the banker, who broke the law, got bailed out and is still living in a mansion.
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    “When a salt of the earth crop duster is victimized by the savings and loan scandal, he must steal back his impounded plane to get revenge on the greedy bank CEO who foreclosed his business in spite of being bailed out himself.”
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    I know that example was a little long but I hope you get the idea.

    Good luck with this, I think it’s a solid premise with possibilities.

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  2. Posted: May 10, 2021In:

    A bipolar mayoress must confront her own fears and demons to prove her innocence when the body of the mayor turns up dead along a baron riverbank with her fingerprints on the murder weapon.

    Richiev Singularity

    I would avoid using the term, face her fears in this logline, because the lead's goal is to prove her innocence, and I don't see how, for example, her facing her fear of spiders, or facing her fear of rejection, would prove her innocence. On the other hand, if you had a story about someone needing tRead more

    I would avoid using the term, face her fears in this logline, because the lead’s goal is to prove her innocence, and I don’t see how, for example, her facing her fear of spiders, or facing her fear of rejection, would prove her innocence.

    On the other hand, if you had a story about someone needing to be rescued on top a skyscraper and the lead had a fear of heights then he would have to ‘overcome his fear’ in order to achieve his goal. but even then, you wouldn’t have to say he must face his fear because it is heavily implied by the situation.
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    “When her husband is murdered and her fingerprints are found on the weapon, a bipolar widow must (Do this thing) in order to prove her innocence.”

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  3. Posted: May 11, 2021In:

    An uxorious husband stops at nothing to get his forlorn wife pregnant while he struggles with his resentful adult step-children over their mother’s estate.

    Richiev Singularity

    I am a little confused by this logline, Usually, children fight over an estate after their parent has died. However, we know the wife is alive because the lead is trying to get her pregnant. I would zero in on that, in one or two words explain why the step-children are fighting over the estate, thenRead more

    I am a little confused by this logline, Usually, children fight over an estate after their parent has died. However, we know the wife is alive because the lead is trying to get her pregnant.

    I would zero in on that, in one or two words explain why the step-children are fighting over the estate, then let us know what the lead character is doing about it.

    Because from how this is written, the fight over the estate seems to be the central conflict

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