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An oddball couple turns a simple break up conversation into a fatal encounter when ulterior motives for the split start surfacing.
When you say 'oddball couple' it hints to the reader your story will be a comedy But the rest of the logline seems to indicate the story isn't a comedy. This makes the logline a bit disjointed.
When you say ‘oddball couple’ it hints to the reader your story will be a comedy
See lessBut the rest of the logline seems to indicate the story isn’t a comedy.
This makes the logline a bit disjointed.
A woman whose mother was murdered when she was a child of twelve, is now, fifteen years later, working as a detective and still pursuing her mother's killer, who, it turns out, is closer than she thinks.
Why now?
Why now?
See lessAn art forgery expert is set on an involuntary adventure that promises to solve an old crime and reveal the secret of her vanished family, all this after a mysterious man delivers an unusual package to her apartment.
Your re-write is much better, I would try placing the inciting incident in the beginning of the longline, I believe it will fit better there... "After a man leaves her the diary of her long lost brother..." I went to Amazon and read the reviews of you book, they are very positive, so it is just a maRead more
Your re-write is much better, I would try placing the inciting incident in the beginning of the longline, I believe it will fit better there… “After a man leaves her the diary of her long lost brother…”
I went to Amazon and read the reviews of you book, they are very positive, so it is just a matter of getting a logline as intriguing as the book.
Hope that helped.
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