1. Posted: March 24, 2013In:

    After joining the crew of an AWOL Confederate steamer, an idealistic medical student must survive the savagery of the ship's captain and crew in order to take part in the destruction of a Union whaling fleet in the Pacific Ocean.

    Tor Dollhouse

    Nice job dude.. It's a bit of a tongue tie atm and thats the only issue.. Happy writing :D Tor

    Nice job dude..

    It’s a bit of a tongue tie atm and thats the only issue..

    Happy writing 😀

    Tor

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  2. Posted: March 24, 2013In:

    As a ranking officer battles to keep himself and his comrades alive and sane in the final months of the great war, a chance encounter with his lost love finally brings the truth of why she disappeared with their baby girl a decade ago and inspires him to try and rekindle the life together that was so prematurely taken from them.

    Tor Dollhouse

    P.S After a chance encounter with his lost love, a (weakness)** officer fights to rekindle the life they had together while staying alive during the final months of World War 1.? I removed before her disappearance because we already know she was lost..

    P.S

    After a chance encounter with his lost love, a (weakness)** officer fights to rekindle the life they had together while staying alive during the final months of World War 1.?

    I removed before her disappearance because we already know she was lost..

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  3. Posted: March 24, 2013In:

    As a ranking officer battles to keep himself and his comrades alive and sane in the final months of the great war, a chance encounter with his lost love finally brings the truth of why she disappeared with their baby girl a decade ago and inspires him to try and rekindle the life together that was so prematurely taken from them.

    Tor Dollhouse

    Good job Greg :D Now there is a uniqueness and intriguing element to the story !! From here the next step is to simplify it down into its core. Remember the rule of K.I.S.S. "After a chance encounter with his lost love, a (weakness)** officer fights to rekindle the life they had together before herRead more

    Good job Greg 😀

    Now there is a uniqueness and intriguing element to the story !!

    From here the next step is to simplify it down into its core.
    Remember the rule of K.I.S.S.

    “After a chance encounter with his lost love, a (weakness)** officer fights to rekindle the life they had together before her disappearance, while staying alive during the final months of World War 1.”

    This is just an example to demonstrate the basic concept..

    Happy writing 😀

    Tor

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