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In search of the ‘ultimate high’, a gang of high school misfits skip school set on finding an abandoned cannabis crop all while trying to evade a pair of obsessive truant officers.

In search of the ‘ultimate high’, a gang of high school misfits skip school set on finding an abandoned cannabis crop all while trying to evade a pair of obsessive truant officers.
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    1. Best Answer
      Singularity

      Check out the formula tab to help with formatting. The recommended format is:

      When [a major event happens], [the hero], must [do the main action].

      I would recommend choosing ?one member of this group of misfits to be the protagonist. It’s a lot easier for the audience to emotionally invest in the film when there is predominantly one person they’re supposed to be investing in. Even in ensemble films there is usually one character who is the “main” one. Great example for a comedy like yours is Jim (Jason Biggs) in American Pie. Make sure to suggest at some sort of emotional arc too – you can use a characteristic to do this. I think it’s really important that these characters aren’t simply looking for weed. Most teen comedies of this sort are “coming of age” stories and the search is more about finding themselves than the prize (again see American Pie).

      Other than that though, I think this has all the elements.

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      Singularity

      Why would anyone abandon such a lucrative cash crop?

      And I? would think that the a more interesting dramatic problem and more interesting characters for the misfits to contend with would be the owners of the property.? And the jeopardy and stakes would be so much higher:? Getting caught by the truant officers will only mean detention.? Getting caught by the pot growers could get them killed.

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      Samurai

      Very good start.

      The plot can be a little sharper. If this is “Pineapple Express with teens,” then definitely go with the growers or other bigger antags. But if it’s “Superbad with pot,” meaning it’s? about the quest to the location (which they reach in Act III), then the truant officers… seem okay. Try to add another sense of the trouble along the way, if it’s a quest. Same with an issue for the protag or co-leads, as in the two movies mentioned and as Mike mentions.

      Add a sense of location.

      >> In search of the ultimate high

      This can be cut and replaced with a description of the crop being a new strain or such. Or they don’t care about the quality, it’s about a huge amount of free weed.

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