After a curse warning, a defiant Napoleon fires cannon blasting the nose off Sphinx of Giza: realizing his troop are dying strangely one by one, he battles to unravel the curse of its invisible revenging guardian demon
Categories: Horror
6 reviews
Agreed with the issues everyone is having. Where is this story heading for the MC?
Me bet is that Napoleon would be the lead character....
Who is the lead character?
The logline seems to cast the demon in the role of the protagonist.? And taking the logline at face value, the? plot seems to promise a lot of violence -- but no suspense.? That is, it's never in doubt that the demon will be able to inflict revenge whenever and on whomever it pleases.? It is never in doubt that Napoleon is doomed.
Yet one of the expectations of the thriller genre -- the? definition of? word "thriller" itself -- is that it is a story that will maintain viewer interest by providing suspense,? lots of suspense.
So where's the suspense?
And where is there is a character for the audience to root for?? Other than some French viewers, perhaps, why would anyone root for Napoleon?? And the demon is certainly not a character for an audience to root for because 1] he's not human; 2] he's not nice--he's violent, vengeful and merciless.
The logline seems to cast the demon in the role of the protagonist.? And taking the logline at face value, the? plot seems to promise a lot of violence -- but no suspense.? That is, it's never in doubt that the demon will be able to inflict revenge whenever and on whomever it pleases.? It is never in doubt that Napoleon is doomed.
Yet one of the expectations of the thriller genre -- the? definition of? word "thriller" itself -- is that it is a story that will maintain viewer interest by providing suspense,? lots of suspense.
So where's the suspense?
And where is there is a character for the audience to root for?? Other than some French viewers, perhaps, why would anyone root for Napoleon?? And the demon is certainly not a character for an audience to root for because 1] he's not human; 2] he's not nice--he's violent, vengeful and merciless.
Lots happening in this logline. A few questions:
Who is the protagonist in this story?
Who is the antagonist?
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