1. Posted: October 2, 2013In:

    After having searched around the world for the perfect girl, a young man finds just what he?s been looking for in his own small town where a high school friend has always been waiting for him.

    Richiev Singularity

    You usually give us pretty solid loglines, I am not quite sold on this one. In loglines I don't believe you should give away the end of the story and that's what it feels like in this logline, (Your character meets the woman of his dreams and lives happily ever after) I would try adding conflict toRead more

    You usually give us pretty solid loglines, I am not quite sold on this one.

    In loglines I don’t believe you should give away the end of the story and that’s what it feels like in this logline, (Your character meets the woman of his dreams and lives happily ever after)

    I would try adding conflict to this logline. Maybe give the girl a reason not to like him or a situation why they can’t be together. Something he must overcome.

    Hope that helped, good luck with this!

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  2. Posted: September 29, 2013In:

    The reckless son of a marijuana grower falls in love with the naive daughter of the local sheriff who is determined to eradicate marijuana cultivation in this modern retelling of Romeo and Juliet.

    Richiev Singularity

    I like the premise but the logline feels more like an explanation of the story than it does a logline. In a logline you have a main character, a goal and something that stands in the way of that goal. In your logline the only character you have given a goal to is the sheriff. I would reword this logRead more

    I like the premise but the logline feels more like an explanation of the story than it does a logline.

    In a logline you have a main character, a goal and something that stands in the way of that goal. In your logline the only character you have given a goal to is the sheriff.

    I would reword this logine so that your main character is the one who has the goal.

    So solid premise, logline could use a little work

    Hope that helped, good luck with this!

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  3. Posted: September 25, 2013In:

    A brilliant Russian Cadet shortly after his graduation day is being targeted by the CIA, his respond was a personal travel to NYC to change all well-known war tactics with the help of his genius weapons.

    Richiev Singularity

    Thanks for the reply... but you confuse me :)

    Thanks for the reply… but you confuse me 🙂

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