1. Posted: July 28, 2013In:

    When her daughter is taken by nanobot creatures, an irresponsible scientist mother must venture beyond the city's walls and find the creature's lair to get her back.

    Richiev Singularity

    I think of nanobots as little computer chips you put into your body to enhance it. for-instance they would heal you or give you extra strength. Millions of them in your bloodstream. Maybe a story about nanobots possessing a person like a techno Demon. "After her daughter is infused with nanobots agaRead more

    I think of nanobots as little computer chips you put into your body to enhance it. for-instance they would heal you or give you extra strength. Millions of them in your bloodstream.

    Maybe a story about nanobots possessing a person like a techno Demon.

    “After her daughter is infused with nanobots against her will, a desperate mother must stop the micro robots that have infiltrated her child’s bloodstream and possess her conscience.”

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  2. Posted: July 26, 2013In:

    When a workoholic father is ordered to spend more time with his disconnected, tech obsessed family, their gadget free weekend in the wilderness turns into a fight for survival against the elements far from the comforts of home.

    Richiev Singularity

    Just a quick side note. You could also title this story: Recalculating. Because when you make a wrong turn the GPS says, "Recalculating" and it seems as though the father's life has taken a wrong turn and he's 'recalculating' his life. Just a thought. Good luck with this!.

    Just a quick side note. You could also title this story: Recalculating.

    Because when you make a wrong turn the GPS says, “Recalculating”

    and it seems as though the father’s life has taken a wrong turn and he’s ‘recalculating’ his life.

    Just a thought. Good luck with this!.

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  3. Posted: July 20, 2013In:

    When her husband dies, Jenny must block the unbearable pain of losing the man she loved with increasingly risky sexual adventures with a womanizer she hates.

    Richiev Singularity

    One comment I would make about your logline. You say she "Must" block the pain by having sex with a womanizer. If you tell us she" must," then you have to give us an -Or- She "Must" do this "Or" this bad thing will happen. You have given us what she "Must" do but haven't told us what will happen ifRead more

    One comment I would make about your logline. You say she “Must” block the pain by having sex with a womanizer.

    If you tell us she” must,” then you have to give us an -Or-

    She “Must” do this “Or” this bad thing will happen. You have given us what she “Must” do but haven’t told us what will happen if she doesn’t.

    Hope that helped, good luck with this!

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