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When a student gets stuck in an elevator he must try to escape before the elevator drops to the bottom floor.
Good point, such as a nagging ex-girlfriend (Boyfriend)
Good point, such as a nagging ex-girlfriend (Boyfriend)
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This has good elements Protagonist-Student Protagonist goal-Getting out of the elevator Stakes-Death Normally there is an Antagonist but in this particular case it seems as if the situation is what's standing in his way Two small ways you can improve this logline First, give us a deadline. He has onRead more
This has good elements
Protagonist-Student
Protagonist goal-Getting out of the elevator
Stakes-Death
Normally there is an Antagonist but in this particular case it seems as if the situation is what’s standing in his way
Two small ways you can improve this logline
First, give us a deadline. He has one hour, he has fifteen minutes, maybe he has a paper due and must get out before he fails and won’t get into college.
Second, give us and adjective describing the student. A clever student, a troubled student, an Honor student, something to give us a glimpse of personality.
Hope that helped, good luck with this!
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Story is conflict Without conflict there can be no story. It can be internal conflict, it doesn't just have to be guns or explosions. But there does have to be conflict to be a story. In your logline a spy must find a scientist and deliver him to work. For there to be a story someone or something muRead more
Story is conflict
Without conflict there can be no story. It can be internal conflict, it doesn’t just have to be guns or explosions. But there does have to be conflict to be a story.
In your logline a spy must find a scientist and deliver him to work.
For there to be a story someone or something must stand in the way of the protagonists achieving his goal.
What you present is an interesting setup but in the logline you should present something preventing the spy from getting the scientist to work, something he must overcome.
If you do that your logline will greatly improve.
Hope that helped, good luck with this!
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