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After deciding to take his dog for a walk in the forest, he finds himself with a wooden box that possesses a powerful ring, but there is someone else, who wants the power.
Since so much needs to be said in a logline, it's important to know what to cut and what to keep. Fore-instance, I would cut "After deciding to take his dog for a walk in the forest," Since going on a walk doesn't sound important to the story. I would also cut "he finds himself with a wooden box," bRead more
Since so much needs to be said in a logline, it’s important to know what to cut and what to keep.
Fore-instance, I would cut “After deciding to take his dog for a walk in the forest,” Since going on a walk doesn’t sound important to the story.
I would also cut “he finds himself with a wooden box,” because the ring’s important, not what material the box is made of.
-After finding a powerful ring-
Next you should give us a glimpse of the main character, You simply refer to him as “He”
How about, -A gruff woodsman-
Next you should do the same for the Antagonist. You simply refer to him as “Someone Else”
How about, -A greedy Wizard-
Now you should tell us what the hero needs to “Do”
-He must protect the ring in order to save the world-
Now let’s try to put this together, maybe make a few small changes and see what comes up.
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“After finding a powerful ring, a gruff woodsman must keep the magical relic from a greedy wizard in order to save the world.”
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Your logline can be different of course, it might not be a ‘Gruff Woodsman’ but a ‘Lonely Baker’ but hopefully you see how I put this together.
I have, good guy, his goal or what he needs to do, who or what is standing in his way and what the stakes are.
Hope this helped. Good luck with this!
See lessAfter a horrific accident, two quarreling lovers are left in a comatose state. Not knowing what had happened they must fall in love once again to be awakened.
How about this: "After a horrific accident two comatose lovers meet in a dream state with no memory and must fall in love again if they're to awaken." Is there an Antagonist or obstacle besides their amnesia?
How about this:
“After a horrific accident two comatose lovers meet in a dream state with no memory and must fall in love again if they’re to awaken.”
Is there an Antagonist or obstacle besides their amnesia?
See lessThe dying emperor of a crumbling galactic empire struggles to hold onto power amidst his son?s machinations and the threat of war against a rival alien empire.
This logline is better, I like it. Sounds like a great story, good luck with this!
This logline is better, I like it. Sounds like a great story, good luck with this!
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