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After critiquing a bunch of other people's loglines, an optimistic screenwriter must improve his own poorly written ideas or wallow in unemployment forever. But what seems like a simple task soon reveals itself to be much harder than first anticipated …
Have you been researching my life for this logline?
Have you been researching my life for this logline?
See lessAfter his fiance calls off their wedding, Tony has numerous sexual encounters. One encounter with a mob boss's girlfriend send him out of town to hide with his best friend on an island full of women, but not the kind of women they seek. The island is a nunnery!
I think the advice above is worth using. How about this: "After a lothario is caught seducing a mob boss's girlfriend he escapes to a secluded nunnery, but must walk the straight and narrow or be ousted from his life saving hiding-out." Good luck with this!
I think the advice above is worth using.
How about this:
“After a lothario is caught seducing a mob boss’s girlfriend he escapes to a secluded nunnery, but must walk the straight and narrow or be ousted from his life saving hiding-out.”
Good luck with this!
See lessThree fathers learn of their teenage daughters? pact to lose their virginity on prom night and band together to stop them.
This logline seems to be all there. It has the feel of over the top comedy and we understand the fathers goal. I might add an adjective such as "Over Protective" and you could also change "band together" to "scheme" but overall we get a sense of the story from this logline. Good luck with this!
This logline seems to be all there. It has the feel of over the top comedy and we understand the fathers goal.
I might add an adjective such as “Over Protective” and you could also change “band together” to “scheme” but overall we get a sense of the story from this logline.
Good luck with this!
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